A quite night led to some interesting editing, which is often a lot better than the uninteresting stuff I normally write. (I’m only quoting some people I know; the rest will tell you . . . hum, I wonder about that. Never mind.)
I rocketed through the flight and got the kids at the school, inside the Great Hall, and back into their Evaluations and Assessments–or as some people at Salem might call them, screwing with kids to see if you can break them. It’s a bit of the ‘ol psychological torture, yeah, and depending on the mood of the Great Benefactor and Protector of the Institution–you gotta worry about any spirit that lives in an underground chamber called The Cauldron–she might just flip you off and send you packing, or . . . she might just drive you a little crazy before kicking your ass back into the hallway.
Now comes up one of my favorite scenes in the story, and last night while putting about to get ready for bed, I realized how something important changes in the story based upon how the characters have been altered. That’s because in the first draft Kerry was sort of the “I wanna explore” sort of person, and it was he who dragged Annie all over London, taking her places he wanted to see. She never said anything because she was hiding what she really was, and was happy to go along for the ride. It was only once they arrived in Amsterdam that Annie was like, “Hey, let check this out.”
As I was reminded, however, Annie is really something of a world traveler, and there’s even a scene in the book where she talks about walking around Hong Kong with her mother. She’s been everywhere, while Kerry has pretty much visit Jack Shite, UK, and little else. Also, from the first chapter you know Annie is hangin’ with the Normal kids–that’s what The Foundation calls them–so she’s sort of a Changeling pretending to be like them. Since that was the case, there was no point in hiding her true nature, and since there is a reason for her wanting to spend time with Kerry–reasons that came out in her E&A–it makes sense that she’s the one dragging ‘Ol Ginger Hair Boy around London and Amsterdam.
Therefore, I was thinking, when I get to the upcoming scene, it not only makes Annie’s reasoning for what she was doing far more clear, but it makes Kerry look all the more clueless about his friend’s motives. He really, totally, completely, ends up looking like he’s been walking about with eyes wide shut and wholly oblivious to what was happening between his new found friend and him.
Which means it should hit him like a much bigger hammer when Nurse Coraline delivers the good news.
It’s really fun to watch the dynamic change between my characters after just a few little personality tweaks. Some moments will remain where they’re pretty much on even ground–usually about the time magic starts happening–but the way I’m viewing things now, Kerry is back to where he should be: always pondering just how great his little Dark Witch is, and how he feels she’s so much better than him.
Yeah, kids, if you were telling me to what do, why didn’t you tell me months ago? I swear–lazy characters . . .