Last night was an interesting one. Not because I was writing–I was, I wrote a new scene, and finished the chapter, so another five hundred fifty words in the pot, as well as few other changes to make the story have more sense. No, this had to do with one of my beta readers.
I saw them on line last night, and they told me about the reading so far. And it was not . . . good. Basically, they got through the first three chapters and they couldn’t read any further. Not because it was bad, mind you, oh no. But it was slow, there was too much time being taken with the characters doing, you know, talking. It didn’t make her want to go on and read more, which she said would mean that no one was going to read it because–boring!
She’s used this argument on me with the last novel of mine that I asked her to read. You have to get a hook right away and pull the reader in. I’ve read that before as well. I asked her to start with Part Three and read that, and she read the hook from the first chapter and said, “That’s what you need, so get rid of Parts One and Two and start with Three.” Sure, no problem: that’s only eighteen thousand words, I’ll cut it right out.
I knew what she was getting at, however, because I’ve heard other writers talk about the same thing. I explained that the first two parts are set up for what happens in Part Three, that you see things being set into place before the trigger is pulled and there’s some massive shit going down. I explained that if you don’t have this, then when you start seeing things happening, they won’t make much sense. Her position was, as a reader, she didn’t care, she wanted to get into the story, and if she couldn’t get past the first ten thousand words, she wasn’t going to read the other forty-three thousand.
It’s a characterization thing. I’ve read about it before, particularly in television writing. Most of those writers will tell you that if something running long, the first thing that goes are character building moments, because you need the car chase, because that’s what the viewer wants. This was the same thing I was hearing last night: please removed this boring set up stuff and get the reader into the action. I even told her that she was saying this, not that it really mattered.
When I first started this short novel for Camp NaNo, I even considered including it in my current story. I jettisoned that idea because, yes, the story is fifty-three thousand word, and should I add that to what I’m now writing, I’ll have a novel close to one hundred thousand words. It wouldn’t be the whole fifty-three, either, because I’d likely kill ten thousand or more words to get it fitted in. Still . . . that takes what I’m working now and pretty much guaranties I’d need to rewrite what I’m working on at the moment.
Maybe what I need are . . .